Someone can help me with grammar?

[jgaraza]

this are my two sentence i want to correct:
"Sweet Teenie Before Bed Cock",
"This Oz Dorothy doesn't have magic shoes, but she sucks so hardly
her boyfriend's cock wishing that
he'll fuck her Ass.

Come in!!!
and see if she get what she clame."

if you ask i´m from Uruguay my natal language is spanish i study english yes but it was 7 years ago and grammar is one thing i don´t remember
and if you have this question in your mind i don´t work with spanish sponsors because they not pay what they say and don´t have real and high quality porn to promote in other words they buy content to english sponsors and old ones jajajaja

i hope you understand
thanks again

[Lemmy]

I'm not trying to be mean here, but it can't be corrected because it's meaningless to begin with.

If your English is very limited I would advise you to keep it as simple as possible. Forget about Dorothy and Oz references (meaningless) and get straight to the point in as few words as possible.

[jgaraza]

thanks Lemmy but i really like that sentence i think it´s like this this Oz`s Dorothy right?

[Lemmy]

thanks Lemmy but i really like that sentence i think it´s like this this Oz`s Dorothy right?Well if you like it, keep it, but be prepared to have your site rejected. I've seen The Wizard of Oz many times and as far as I recall there was no fucking of any kind. The "meaningless" judgement stands.

[Tekster]

Well if you like it, keep it, but be prepared to have your site rejected. I've seen The Wizard of Oz many times and as far as I recall there was no fucking of any kind. The "meaningless" judgement stands.

Totally agree with Lemmy here. It is meaningless.

[secretagentwilly]

Here's a stab at it:

"Sweet Teenie take a big cock. Dorothy's not in Oz no more and she doesn't have her magic shoes. She sucks and fucks hoping to get back home. She does it all, she even gets her ass fucked. Come in and see if she earns her way home."

good luck...

[jgaraza]

well thanks for the tip i didn´t know that you are so stricts sorry i made a mistake and i just correct it

thanks again

[johnnybg]

You can always copy some sales text right off the site you wish to promote. It's not the best way (actually it's not very good at all) but it's a start. Some sponsors even give you pre-made text links which you can use on your sites.

Go to some English classes, invest in yourself. It will be useful anyway, not only for adult webmastering.

[Useless]

Here's a stab at it:

"Sweet Teenie take a big cock. Dorothy's not in Oz no more and she doesn't have her magic shoes. She sucks and fucks hoping to get back home. She does it all, she even gets her ass fucked. Come in and see if she earns her way home."
That's not much better.

jgaraza, unless you intend on coming here and having the board rewrite your text for each site you build, you are going to have copy it from your sponsor. Of course, the sponsors tend not be the brightest bulbs in the box either. So their text may be deficient in the same manner as yours.

Also, don't use characters from children's movies on porn sites. I don't care how well written that text is or isn't. I'd reject it for the Oz references.

[LowryBigwood]

Also, don't use characters from children's movies on porn sites. I don't care how well written that text is or isn't. I'd reject it for the Oz references.

Exactly right Useless. Jgar, how many people searching for the wizard of oz terms want to land on a porn page? I am betting a big fat ZERO. You are not going to get listed at very many places at all with that crap. |thumb

[LD]

I've seen The Wizard of Oz many times and as far as I recall there was no fucking of any kind. .


Damn shame, too.

[jgaraza]

ok thanks all i understand know that in fact i understand that in message number 4 from Lenny
now i know what can i write and what not
thanks again
bye =O)

[Greenguy]

|pokefun|Lenny:D

[Lemmy]

Who the fuck is Lenny? |huh :D

[jgaraza]

sorry it´s Lemmy not Lenny
my mistake

[Useless]

Who the fuck is Lenny? |huh :DThat would make a great domain name. ;)

[Den]

very common mistake - hardly is used to suggest that sth is unlikely or unreasonable. hard is already an adjective.

[HarryM]

You need more boosty blonde ducks in your story